Heh, Xander does love his movie references. Would he really be that sanguine about his appearance, though? Maybe Willow could say it to him. I'm just a sucker for Willow/Xander dialogue.
Hm, there's an idea. That sounds like the kind of thing she'd say to be encouraging.
Now that's v Xander (reminds me of his great speech to Dawn). I think you've captured him really nicely in this whole thing, and it's great to see his character finally given not just SOMETHING TO DO but something worthy of his potential.
Aw shucks. We do like the poor schmuck, yes we do...
Poor Buffy. Still a really good job creating sympathy for her -- maybe that could be brought up a little in Willow's summary? It was a really powerful scene and it would be cool if it were kind of emphasized more in this recall -- it's v summarized (understandably so, since the reader's been there and Willow's filling them all in). Not a biggie.
I think we're saving that for Bad Eurotrip, where Willow gets to tell her tale to Giles and Dawn as well. Then they can all have a big cry.
((pained)) Aaaaaagh. Maybe not.
We can't take away all of Kennedy's annoying traits - it wouldn't be true to the character. But at least she's a good sport about Lo's grumbling response...
Hmmmmm, this is a nice bit of characterization, but maybe you could cut or summarize it
I'll let The Hook consider that one - the expanded flashback was kind of her idea. (You know me; left to my own devices I tend to be Mister Terse.)
I might be revealing thickheadedneess, but I don't quite get this....alternate dimension? What?
The point being that, for all the talk in these shows about "hell dimensions," we never hear about hell hell. For these kids, the word "hell" has come to mean merely "any one of countless alternate dimensions with less shrimp and more demons." Perhaps we could stand to elaborate on this a bit more...
Hmmmmmm, I smell setup for a later payoff, there....
Ooooooh yes. Xander has returned from his underworld odyssey with a Very Important Insight into the fundamental nature of their enemy.
((shrieks)) I LOVE that! I am SO taking that as a shoutout to ME. ME, ME, ME. OK, is that Doc Holliday as in Wyatt Earp or am I missing something?
Right on both counts. Hope you're happy. :-)
OK, I totally liked that. And I also liked that Graciela pushed Lo a little bit and they HAD AN ACTUAL CONVERSATION about something bugging them, rather than just shrugging it off.
It would be nice if the next generation of superheroes were a bit less dysfunctional, wouldn't it?
The devil-idle-hands comment was good, but maybe just a bit too reminiscent of Xander's "you are what you eat" earlier -- the 2 remarks just sort of felt emotionally similar. But I liked it.
Well, the "hackneyed truisms" thing was intended as kind of a running theme for this chapter, but maybe we're being a little heavyhanded about it.
This is totally picky, but would the police really leave the 2 girls alone with Sanguine? Maybe it could be a cop who saw them in action earlier and felt s/he owed them one? I'm just picky. But that's why you looove me.
Not a bad idea. Got to uphold that suspension of disbelief, after all...
I really liked this (it reminded me a little bit of Glory's "original chiclet in kingdom of the blind" speech)
Plus, it throws down something of a gauntlet for the junior Slayers - to use their superpowers to actually make things better, instead of merely upholding the status quo. Like Lindsey, it's always bugged me that heroes traditionally play a purely reactionary role, while anyone who aspires to actually change things is automatically branded as a villain.
Hunh, are you planning to hook up Xander and Willow in Europe maybe, or what?
Gosh, it hadn't really occurred to us. Xander and Willow? There's an odd pairing...
Anyways, you'll be happy to know that there will indeed be Naked Giles. You're welcome!
![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png){kind=small}
Re: nakedGilesnakedGilesnakedGilesnakedGilesnakedGilesnakedGilesnakedGiles
Date: 2004-05-28 07:23 am (UTC)Heh, Xander does love his movie references. Would he really be that sanguine about his appearance, though? Maybe Willow could say it to him. I'm just a sucker for Willow/Xander dialogue.
Hm, there's an idea. That sounds like the kind of thing she'd say to be encouraging.
Now that's v Xander (reminds me of his great speech to Dawn). I think you've captured him really nicely in this whole thing, and it's great to see his character finally given not just SOMETHING TO DO but something worthy of his potential.
Aw shucks. We do like the poor schmuck, yes we do...
Poor Buffy. Still a really good job creating sympathy for her -- maybe that could be brought up a little in Willow's summary? It was a really powerful scene and it would be cool if it were kind of emphasized more in this recall -- it's v summarized (understandably so, since the reader's been there and Willow's filling them all in). Not a biggie.
I think we're saving that for Bad Eurotrip, where Willow gets to tell her tale to Giles and Dawn as well. Then they can all have a big cry.
((pained)) Aaaaaagh. Maybe not.
We can't take away all of Kennedy's annoying traits - it wouldn't be true to the character. But at least she's a good sport about Lo's grumbling response...
Hmmmmm, this is a nice bit of characterization, but maybe you could cut or summarize it
I'll let The Hook consider that one - the expanded flashback was kind of her idea. (You know me; left to my own devices I tend to be Mister Terse.)
I might be revealing thickheadedneess, but I don't quite get this....alternate dimension? What?
The point being that, for all the talk in these shows about "hell dimensions," we never hear about hell hell. For these kids, the word "hell" has come to mean merely "any one of countless alternate dimensions with less shrimp and more demons." Perhaps we could stand to elaborate on this a bit more...
Hmmmmmm, I smell setup for a later payoff, there....
Ooooooh yes. Xander has returned from his underworld odyssey with a Very Important Insight into the fundamental nature of their enemy.
((shrieks)) I LOVE that! I am SO taking that as a shoutout to ME. ME, ME, ME. OK, is that Doc Holliday as in Wyatt Earp or am I missing something?
Right on both counts. Hope you're happy. :-)
OK, I totally liked that. And I also liked that Graciela pushed Lo a little bit and they HAD AN ACTUAL CONVERSATION about something bugging them, rather than just shrugging it off.
It would be nice if the next generation of superheroes were a bit less dysfunctional, wouldn't it?
The devil-idle-hands comment was good, but maybe just a bit too reminiscent of Xander's "you are what you eat" earlier -- the 2 remarks just sort of felt emotionally similar. But I liked it.
Well, the "hackneyed truisms" thing was intended as kind of a running theme for this chapter, but maybe we're being a little heavyhanded about it.
This is totally picky, but would the police really leave the 2 girls alone with Sanguine? Maybe it could be a cop who saw them in action earlier and felt s/he owed them one? I'm just picky. But that's why you looove me.
Not a bad idea. Got to uphold that suspension of disbelief, after all...
I really liked this (it reminded me a little bit of Glory's "original chiclet in kingdom of the blind" speech)
Plus, it throws down something of a gauntlet for the junior Slayers - to use their superpowers to actually make things better, instead of merely upholding the status quo. Like Lindsey, it's always bugged me that heroes traditionally play a purely reactionary role, while anyone who aspires to actually change things is automatically branded as a villain.
Hunh, are you planning to hook up Xander and Willow in Europe maybe, or what?
Gosh, it hadn't really occurred to us. Xander and Willow? There's an odd pairing...
Anyways, you'll be happy to know that there will indeed be Naked Giles. You're welcome!