Holy Thesaurus, Batman!
Sep. 2nd, 2004 09:38 pm![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png){kind=small}
thedeadlyhookHave I mentioned that the next chapter of the story I'm writing is kicking my ass? Obviously, also, I've had too much beer.
And now they're schutupping. Hard and fast. She opens to him like a flower. She breaks against him like waves against a cliff. His hardness fills her with his cold, dead seed.
And then, he ate her out.
(cough I'm joking. Believe me.
And now they're schutupping. Hard and fast. She opens to him like a flower. She breaks against him like waves against a cliff. His hardness fills her with his cold, dead seed.
And then, he ate her out.
(cough I'm joking. Believe me.
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Date: 2004-09-03 03:46 pm (UTC)(no subject)
Date: 2004-09-03 03:58 pm (UTC)Seriously, though, the word choice thing.... god, could the schizophrenia of our founding ancestors be more obvious? Everything's either abstract and flowery or locker-room crude. And the middle road just ends up taking you to the doctor's office. Argh! (bangs head)
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Date: 2004-09-03 04:40 pm (UTC)"Millimeter by millimeter, his penis thickened as it became engorged with blood. Observing his increasing tumescence, she began to orally stimulate the glans and shaft, and his arousal increased by several metric units..."
"Tumescence" isn't so bad, though. It could almost work in a bad 19th-century poem:
"My cock expands, it grows tumescent; My blood is bubbling, effervescent!"
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Date: 2004-09-03 04:43 pm (UTC)Well, now I'm gonna have that problem I have with the South Park song, where somebody told me what they thought Kenny was saying and now I can't stop hearing it. I'll never be able to hear that poem in the same wayagain.
You're in big trouble, mister.